Joet63 'Wobble Board' January '11

joet63 · Post by **joet63** » Mon Jan 24, 2011 12:51 pm

Hi Everyone, it so nice to back here again, I have missed the camaraderie in here.

I have posted part of a new song on my myspace page, it's called; 'Wobble Board'. Please have a listen and see what you think. Any comments will be appreciated, I have to finish it yet, like adding a bassline and a few bits and pieces, not sure what yet, but hopefully something good!

Here's the link; www.myspace.com/joethompson63

Cheers

joe

georgeinar · Post by **georgeinar** » Sat Jan 29, 2011 5:00 am

Sorry, I just caught your post here.

As it is, it kind of works as video game music, it's hard to comment as this seems to be a fragment, so many directions you can take this. What's here sounds good, I'm curious to what you will end up with, using this as your inspiration. I would definately interrupt the rhythm with some nice breaks or changeups. Let us know if you post another version.

joet63 · Post by **joet63** » Sat Jan 29, 2011 8:47 am

Hi George, Yeah you're right it does sound like vidoe game music hehehe, it also needs some kind of direction, maybe a middle eight or just like you say a chord change or something like that. Thanks for listening George and I will repost an updated version soon.

joe

Pumpkin King · Post by **Pumpkin King** » Thu Feb 03, 2011 9:16 pm

A good start. Since the song is repetitive, I would definitely agree with variation in the rhythm, as george said. Like varying the rhythm for every few measures that seem appropriate. So since it's not finished, keep experimenting and post an update.

ellll · Post by **ellll** » Sun Feb 06, 2011 2:24 pm

Hi Joe,

Yes now is the time to really put in a strong contrasting melody; it will bring the sound to a more exciting feel and lend new interest. The song as you have presented IS repetitive and needs that contrasting melody, and some rhythmic additions.

It has a very nice sound overall however; just needs some real contrast ..what they often call "hooks" in the prof use....

I would like to see a contrasting second, or middle section to bring a change in overall feel... Try it sometime ..It could be much better with a simple ABA song form...

I also agree with George and Pumkin on the rhythmic elements. A song using a fairly straight sound of electronics really!! needs that heavier drum/rhythm line in there.

Nice Joe and we will look for more soon!

Good Sound.. Nice start..! Now..Dress it up a little!

My Regards John, Johnny, ellll

joet63 · Post by **joet63** » Tue Feb 08, 2011 10:04 pm

Hi John, I do agree it is repetitive, I haven't got back to it due to work commitments, hopefully soon. I will take on board what you, George and Joe have said and will try to beef it up some hehehe, maybe add some guitar and bass.

Thanks for your input John, Joe and George, very much appreciated.

sewa · Post by **sewa** » Sun Feb 13, 2011 11:25 am

Hi Joe,

its a good starting point. You could phase this loop in by starting with the bass, then adding the drum groove and that mono synth line. Then take the drum groove to another level and begin your melody. This could be interesting.

my 2c

sewa

ronbo27 · Post by **ronbo27** » Thu Feb 24, 2011 4:01 pm

Hi Joe,
You`re getting lots of good ideas from comments already posted.....you`re on the right track....go for it...I love heavy bottom end on everything.....LOL....thought I`d mention that.....
CHEERS!
Ron

joet63 · Post by **joet63** » Thu Feb 24, 2011 10:44 pm

Hi Sewa & Ron, Thanks for your comments.

I'm going to put a bass guitar line in at some point, as well as experimenting with the ideas I've been given and I will try to create a decent melody line.

Ron, I have been told I have a heavy bottom end hehehe